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Old 01-02-06, 06:33 PM   #17
Johnny 6-feet
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A good topic with some dope one liners in here, the imagery was straightforward but it brought the piece to life. Your vocab could've been a little stronger but it did the job well enough. it would've been good to see more multi's in this.

i wore my heart on my sleeve as i gave you the shirt off my back,

see, U were the principal of my thoughts when i sat in the office,

^Those lines were dope especially^

keep posting, good work overall.
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