Title was sounding horrible to be honest but the piece itself was very good. Your structure was kind of eww but every other aspect was seemingly nice.

You had very nice, colorful vocabulary. Nothing too mind blowing but bigger descriptive words making the piece better.

Your imagery and emotion. More so the emotion here... But it shows in your work. Very felt and taken to heart on some of those lines.

Everything else is kind of .... lets say, non-essential.. like the flow and what not.

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