ok i'll take the time out of my day to do this
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This piece was very good.. very intriguing and complex. Your vocabulary was marvelous man. Very complex, maybe a bit to much for some but this was a good topic to have complexity with. Your imagery and emotion.. ahh the imagery. Very descriptive here man. Good mental picture running thourgh during this whole piece. Your emotion was heart felt.... Not as big on the emotion here as i was the imagery but I felt it. Your structure was on point and almost faultless..
Anything I left out.. sorry... good piece and keep writing homey..