pain is weakness leaving the body
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whoa..... i didn't really get it at first, but i like where it took me.... very original concept...... i like how u used the metaphors to describe what the woman was doing, different way of thinking of corporate America...... decent strcture too, lol, i never could get that down.... keep writin playa.....
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"I don't want to be deep... I want to feel deep and use that feeling to express depth itself..."
-Konchance
my poetry:
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