Eeeeeeeeeeeh... I really like and didn't like this. I loved the atempt at real hard, thought provoking work. I mean, that's similar to how I like to write so I felt at home in the style. However, undernieth the barried meanings and poetics the face value lines just could have been alot better. This poem fell short because there were just simple re-wording problems. Like, if you were to re-phrase some of the lines they would be read with just sooo much more power and impact. So, keep it up and just re-read a few times to really make sure your work is the best it can be.