Pretty deep...the vocabulary was decent, and the structure was alright. An occasional inner-rhyme thrown in made it flow good.
Quote:
Peace to your shades, yet favoured train, who's stolen,
Amidst the generous struggle! over whose limbs were broken
The friendly hand of Death, has interposed remorse,
His fated curtain; stronger and smarter than human force
To lengthened anguish; nor for you prepares you pray,
As you watch the breeze blow your mother's ashes away..
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I liked those lines. The topic was pretty good as well, not the most original or creative I've seen but it was still an entertaining read. The name of the topic was catchy as well, which is good, because you can have the best poem/topical in the world, but if no one pays attention to it, you may as well not have written it at all.
I'll check out some of your other pieces as well. Thanks for leaving feed on Crumbling Kingdom.