This was an aight piece. Some parts i liked. My favorite bar was the first one:

armagedon is comming world is ending
pictures of steel and airplaines bending

I thought that was pretty cool. The vocab in this was ok and the flow was a little off in some places. The imagery was pretty good though. Keep writing tho, i'd give this a 5/10. Please get at any of my links in the sig, if u havent already. Thanks.