Thread: --Look Out--
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Old 01-20-06, 04:09 PM   #3
ksr
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nice piece.....
imagery n vocab was good, but it doesnt really go anywhere
seems to be just describing a person
would be a lot better with more multis and rhymes inside of the lines
i like the ending, with the opponent he fears being himself

RTF to the link in my sig, thx
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