Voted For: Tech Skillz

JC REAL

as i write this shit down i remember ur name
rvs hall of fame NO rvs wall of shame
- Not workin, bad opener
i could write down nothing and still of won
i beating u boy just like u were my son
- Played concept
u think ur so wild, i'll call u the animal
u eating ur moms pussy, don't that make u a cannibal?
- Not dissing your opponent
ur rymes suck hardcore they remind me of shit
u shoulda realized from the start who u fuckin wit
- The fuck NO
u gotta remember the name j-c-r-e-a-l
ur lines are as phat* as the dog on taco bell
- Played wordplay
my rymes so tight u can't fit ur midget dick in
last time u had pussy, ur cat u was a lickin
- Not workin....

This was not a good verse at all - Firstly, you really need to work on being original with your punches and creative...do something different, use a new concept - Also you need to use PERSONALS, they will help you win battles...diss the opponent directly, your verse basically could apply to anyone which is NOT a good thing....and finally, when you do those two you will also need to word your lines better to make them hit harder

Tech Skills

You's My New Bitch, So You Coming Out With New-B Skills
We'd Like You....But You're More Played Out Than Movie Reels
- Not bad
I'll Lay Out The Retirement Mat And Let You Roll In Defeat
You Dress In B.u.m. Clothing.....And Think You Repping The Streets
- No
I've Seen Your Last Battle Homie, I Must Admit, That Shit's Wack
You Couldn't Make Me Look Retarted.....Even If Left My Wrist Cracked
- Not really workin
Can Tell You Like Ass And It's To Bad There's Nodody That Gives You
So When We Battle I'll Let You See The Moon.....
........And The Stars From The Punches I Give You!
- Nice...
Wins From Herbs, Little Kids Who Get Wipped And There Diapers Checked!
You Couldn't Gamble With My Career......If You Decided To Place A Bet!
- Too basicish

Pretty sure I have read better from you, but you had some ok concepts here but your wording really let you down at times...work on being more original, and your wording and you will improve...flow was fine, rhymes were fine as well....personals, you need more though I understand he is new you could have at least played around with his name...

Ok, this was a one-sided battle - JC REAL, you need to elevate...read what I wrote....

Vote - Tech Skillz

Stay Up both....


And return the favour, my battle has STILL not been concluded
http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=216087

Peace