Lol do you not proof reed? Structure is everywhere, try and pick a steady line length... Prefferably one on the shorter side to make the piece flow better. Grammar... *Babbles like an idiot* I'm not even going to get into that. Lets just leave it at, ebonics have no place in textual hip-hop unless the piece is directly about just that. And overall the whole 'Take Over' concept is sooooo over played and you didn't have anything in this to make yours stand out above the rest of the ones that have been done.