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This was alright I thought. Felt the emotion, wasn't really feeling the imagery all too well. Had lots of internals which kept the read at a fast pace with a good flow - helped suit the way you ended it off. It was well written but meh, I dunno... just thought it coulda been better if you took more time on it thats all... Decent drop all in all though, respek.
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