Voted For: Mentalz

my vote goes to Mentalz.Yall both had some good pieces but I felt that Mentalz approched the topic better.Lets see Mentalz as I start reading your piece it had a real good opener which really opened my eyes to read your piece.And as I read down your piece you came good with your Imagry and emotion in this piece.Your Imagry was good cuz when I read the piece I could picture what was going on in your piece.And the emotion was real strong in this piece cuz I could really feel it when I was reading it.Also you had a good structure and good use of your vocabulary too.And also you were real creative with the topic.Oz your piece was good too.As I read down Oz piece he had a good opener also that opened my eyes to read your piece.You had good Imagry and emotion too but I thnk you could have went deeper with the emotion in this piece.But the Imagry was good cuz I could also picture what was going on in your piece too.Oz also had a good structure and good use of his vocabulary.And also he was real creative with the topic.But after reading both pieces in this battle Mentalz gets my vote.


vote/Mentalz

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