Listening...
I used this beat...
Wow...your flow is all over the place
. Following your lyrics...it' sounds like your sorda on beat at first glance...but you have to mad shorten your lines so it fits on beat. Delivery is decent...doesn't sound like your too comfortable though. With some work on your flow, you would be sick.
Keep at it.
RTF
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=220491
Feed used 1/30/06 "Fall Back"