eh, my opinion, the whole thing was a little silly, i could see it being good if you did it as a joke, but the starting seemed serious, then it was just talking about video games the rest of the way, sorry dude.......still not bad, and you're elevating, which is good, just try and expand on your thoughts a little, use better wording, mix up the vocab, i'm not saying use MORE vocab, i'm just saying mix it up, you know what i'm saying? yeah, but not bad, keep up

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