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Geaux Fuck Yourself
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Okay... I don't sugar coat anything.
This wasn't very good.
Get rid of the //'s to start with. It looks horrible. Also, try to not rhyme the same word in three lines (acid). Although it was better than what I expected, you have some serious issues in not only your structure, but in your all around. Everyone before me has pretty much pointed out everything else.
3/10
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Originally Posted by SPuL
^dude it's poetic, what did you expect? He believed his ex still loved him after cheating on him with 9 guys and 1 girl.
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