flow could be a little better, don't like how you dragged out ya words...should've done it a few bars and then went back to the normal flow...

I like the effect you did though, spittin' the 1st part of the bar then back over it with the end of the bar...

lottah people don't reaiZe it's a really good techniQue for UPing your emotion cuz you don't really have to worry about your breath so you can concentrate more on emotion...oh yeah, this beat's FUCKin' hawt lol

but yeah, up the flow on this and it'll be better