this wasnt the deepest poem i ever read u need a lil elevation, the structure wasnt the neatest and it was somewhat espressive but i think u pretty much just did this just ta drop a poem for feed...put your feeling into it and add some emotion in ur writing, ask urself on what ur true feelings are what ur truly going through at that very moment and express urself...if your happy make a poem bout sumthin happy if ur sad make a depressed poem if u strugglin wit sumthin make it inta a poem...when u put ur real emotion into it is when u truly shine as a poet and a rapper but werd this wasnt too bad id give this a 5.5/10 keep elevating Elevation