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Old 02-07-06, 09:44 PM   #4
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Ehh, you had the worst of the verses.. Structure was pretty fucked up.. break it down into bars.. And try to add something different into your verse instead of the same old stupid shit that everyone else does.. Everyone could use a lot of elevating in this piece..
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