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Old 02-11-06, 04:13 PM   #10
DaTrusHurtz
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Fuck that, I'm voting, I'm an honest voter, I always put beef aside

Spul's Verse:
Lookin' at him, it's hard to imagine he's in his late teens
With a nose that makes such a great point... it belongs on the debate team(3)
dope shit, I liked this a lot
It's kinda funny how much of a fag you are, never getting imbersed
Man, I've never seen a homo joke...
................................................ until I saw you spittin' your verse!
way too corny and not harsh
His skill will NEVER peak, cuz we all kno that this guy's wack
Jack's the only dick you could beat... and not worry about the climax
I hate dick jokes but this was funny, okay
Can't even commit suicide, JTR's a waste of space
He tried to cut his wrist...
...................till his hand went and smacked him in his face!(1)
nah, you coulda done more with that pic
You might be the punchline champ... but you still gon finish last
Yea, we all know you got a belt... leavin' marks all over your ass
belt wordplay is played
Watch me rip this woodpecker, trying to peck away his foes
I ain't bending the truth...
............... you could do that alone, just with your nose!(3)
dope, good shit right here
Keep saying that you're the best, you're gonna win. Quit being posh
You're joshin' us, but can't you see? No one ever likes to be Josh..ed
concept is decent, coulda been worded better but not bad
You're an idiot, kid.... it's on your back, and stickin', dude
We already kno you're signed....
......................................... that's why we're always kickin' you!
i don't get it? I thought hard about it too. If this turns out to be close I'll reserve the right to change my vote after understanding this punch.
And fuck you, 9th and truck, ya'll ain't in this battle, so I won't bother
Cuz..
Y'all couldn't even make ends meet... if y'all were butt humping eachother
ewww, what a waste of a line, no reason to diss them
You're gonna taste defeat again with the way you're flowin', so back-off
It's plain to see I'm beating him single-handedly...
.................................................. ............the way I'm throwin' jack-off!
i can't believe you used a jack-off line. One dick joke was enough
I ain't talkin' Oakland Raiders, when I say your games left in the Moss
Cuz no matter what you do ideal......... you another title loss
I haven't seen an ideal line, but this didn't hit that hard
Ain't got a chance of winnin', when your spitting wack rhymes galore
You're prehistoric, so like your hat....
.................................................. .... I'ma leave this dino-saur!(2)
hmm, joke is a bit of a stretch to really be effective
It's like T-Mac at road games, the way I'm putting this 1 away
I'm winnin', so no questions asked, when I say JT-R you gay
worded well, but concept was stupid
Your rhymes are less felt, then scratched up pool tables, you're lame
And..
We all know that UBISOFT.... and I ain't talkin' bout computer games!
this is kinda forced.. it's believe it's pronounced U-B-I-SOFT, not like U-BE-SOFT, but concept is fresh anyway, cool line
I'll leave you so far behind. My rhymes the illest, I come the meanest
You can't be the ruler of RV...
...................cuz you'll need miles to measure the margin between us!
ruler shit is really played

Quotables (6):
Lookin' at him, it's hard to imagine he's in his late teens
With a nose that makes such a great point... it belongs on the debate
His skill will NEVER peak, cuz we all kno that this guy's wack
Jack's the only dick you could beat... and not worry about the climax
Watch me rip this woodpecker, trying to peck away his foes
I ain't bending the truth...
............... you could do that alone, just with your nose!(3)
Keep saying that you're the best, you're gonna win. Quit being posh
You're joshin' us, but can't you see? No one ever likes to be Josh..ed
Your rhymes are less felt, then scratched up pool tables, you're lame
And..
We all know that UBISOFT.... and I ain't talkin' bout computer games!

Comments: This was quite possibly the most inconsistent verse I've ever read. There was some really good shit in here. The two nose lines hit really hard and were pretty witty. The rest of the lines I quoted were decent. However, there were some pretty terrible lines in this verse like that jack-off line and the line ya wasted on MC Firetruck. Better verse than last week, just too up and down. It seems like you just don't know what makes a good text punch cuz ya do audio and the two are so different.

vs.

Jack The Ripper's Verse:

Guys, girls, they all love Jack, and you’ve been on my saddle
I’m pulling tricks to get laid
…you’re pulling tricks to win your battles
Avg line.. personal, hits well, just kinda basic
Take a bad L, stop complimenting my style, you envy my worse
I calmly key shit to beat you, but ya still get me hyp-per every verse
wordplay is pretty cool, but the punch itself isn't that harsh
Fuck being friends, I’m quick to backstab, ya heard me?
The type to betray, and Pierce ya back like ya fuckin jersey
Comparing light piercings to his punches mighta been more effective. Okay, just not great
You’re nerdy, I give orders, you follow or I’m wreckin ya face
Because while I Boston’s, you’re just reppin the place
Boston shit is played, and this wasn't that harsh anyway
And messin with gays, ugly faggots take a big loss, hoe
Wich is appropriate, cuz you make that painting look like a Picasso
lol, cool shit, i liked this use of the pic
Get tossed bro, annoy me again on msn, and I’m beating ya, bitch
But fuck telling you to shut up
…you’re already eating ya lips
more of a statement than really a punch so not that hard hitting
I’m bleeding ya shit, move the fuck over, scoot whore
Or you can take more losses then all the teams you route for
A bit statementish, not bad line, but not great
I’ll shoot more, don’t bother posting, in fact, I’ll stop ya shit
Cuz if a profound your verse, he’d consider it the exact opposite
haven't seen profound wordplay, i liked this
I’m stomping chicks, ya scared of this cuz I’m Judo tearing fools
Deal him such a nice pair of kicks
…this poor bitch'll try and wear 'em to school
again, pretty decent, hits well
And wtf @ the outfit, damn this bum aint tight
Forget ya fucking headband
...we just needa get this fucking headband from the site
kinda statementish but cool concept and personal
Aight, you're out of toon, and i'm leaving you shook, lad
& after peeping that pic, I knew why this doodle look bad
haven't seen a doodle line but this wasn't that effective
I cook cats, cartoons, wtv, I said i'ma hate you
Cuz this faggot'll prolly want a bed animate too
same as above, creative but not harsh
Ripped with the pen dude, fuck this whore's wack
Yet you're def' tep 10. in audio
...now thank senser and Triple_N appearences for that
okay personal, but if combined with wordplay coulda been wittier
Matter of fact, RV's never had great audio, kid's suck n' sound dislexic
Wich goes to show, the MAS majority of RV's audio is fuckin pathetic
I liked this line a lot, hits pretty well
Got the worst S-Click, not worth one listen, you aint a psycho with rhymes
Especially since...
no one even noticed that you recycled those lines!!!
true, but not that hard hitting.. kinda left me with a so-what feeling

Quotables (5):
And messin with gays, ugly faggots take a big loss, hoe
Wich is appropriate, cuz you make that painting look like a Picasso
I’ll shoot more, don’t bother posting, in fact, I’ll stop ya shit
Cuz if a profound your verse, he’d consider it the exact opposite
I’m stomping chicks, ya scared of this cuz I’m Judo tearing fools
Deal him such a nice pair of kicks
…this poor bitch'll try and wear 'em to school
And wtf @ the outfit, damn this bum aint tight
Forget ya fucking headband
...we just needa get this fucking headband from the site
Matter of fact, RV's never had great audio, kid's suck n' sound dislexic
Wich goes to show, the MAS majority of RV's audio is fuckin pathetic

Comments: JTR, I feel very similar to your verse this week as you did last week. This verse was the exact opposite of Spul's it was very consistent, too consistent. In fact, because this battle was 30 lines, your verse got boring. You had some personals, but a lot of wordplay, too much of it. Some wordplay is awesome, but too much gets tiring. Some of it I'd seen before and didn't do too much for me, and some I hadn't, like the kicks and profound lines. The personals were all okay, but none of them left me with an "OUCH" kinda feeling. When doing quotables, I had a difficult time with your verse because so many of the lines were okay, not bad, close to quotable, just not quotable. This verse you posted was solid, some good lines in it, just a lot of statements that didn't do too much for me.

Overall Comments: Extremely difficult decision right here because JTR writes like a pure text head and Spul writes like a audio head/comedian. Here's what it came down to in my eyes. JTR's verse had some cool shit, but a lot of it was average and after reading it a few times, I didn't feel much harshness from it. Spul had some terrible lines, but he also had some pretty witty ones. I really coulda gone either way here. Again, and this is somewhat dick to say, but I want to reiterate that neither of you deserved to be here. I don't care what the newbs of this site said, both of you lost last week, and pretty clearly at that. However, I feel JTR didn't really step up his game for this match, just wrote what was an average verse by his standards. Spul wrote a far better verse this week than he did last week and as a whole, I think his verse was harder hitting, and thus, the better one. Close match, good one fellas.

Vote - Spul
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