shodown got this he had much more emotion in this aswell as imagery,
i feel he also had a much better vocab, it was also interesting in how he expressed his views in this one good shit man....

soldier you came decent man but nothing special, i felt u could of did alot more in the imagery section i mean alot of times its good to leave the reader thinking or wondering , but its like everything u said was as expected be creative dude,ur emotion however was strong but could of been stronger.

and boo at vafinest

anyways goodjob shodown

v/shodown

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