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Old 02-15-06, 04:28 PM   #3
Dervla
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Chill, feed will come. Anyway's, this was a good verse, nicly done with the flow, rhyme scheme was good. The concept was cool, writing in 2nd person. You viewed your feelings of the Democracy was quite good. Vocab was cool, noting much more to say. This was overall a good verse, keep it up.
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