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Old 02-16-06, 06:54 AM   #6
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nice poetry/rap fosho

Adam's Apple's Choked In And A Shadow's Reopened
Canoe A River Of Death While My Paddle Is Broken


plenty of nice mettas


Hold strong like vices, no evading, outside of shading heavy in deep voids
Ever present in the essence of hope, don’t cope know one’s forever damned


i lost the rhyme scheme a few times and thought a few rhymes was forced a lil

but altogether this is a strong piece..with lots of conceptual matter going down


yeah coo writing..HD used long lines... good still
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