DQ:

To be honest i wasnt feeling your verse. It was boring. The plot wasnt there and it just lingered on. More rambling than anything. The emotion was there but that was it. I dont really go on vocab for a topical but you did have decent vocab but your verse was absent from imagery. There were no vivid pictures there. This was definately not one of your best pieces. You could have wrote this a bit better.

Overall: 5.5/10


Sabre:

Despite the fact that the verse was short, it was also well written. The imagery was good as was the emotion. Most of all though your imagery stood out and ive been saying that for weeks. you probably have some of the best imagery ive seen from a topical writer. It all came together at the last few lines and it made your piece solid. Definately would have been better if it was longer but you squeaked this one out.

Overall: 6.5/10


Vote: Sabre

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