Judicial:

Decent verse, It was more than i expected from you but the whole heaven vs. hell theme has been used 1,991,872 times. Leave it alone. Come with something original. The emotion was ok. good wordplay. the imagery should have been better, And the verse in all would have been better if it was a bit longer. You took all this info you wanted to write and stuck in a verse that was too short.

Overall: 5/10


Oz.:

Ok theme to your verse. But where the hell has your skill gone. I remember when you were one of the best writers on this site. Now it seems like you halfass all your verses. You tried to bring emotion here but it wasnt consistent. The imagery was ok but i know you can do better than this. And im ny opinion it was garbage and not something you should be writing. Put more time and effort into it. the only reason im gonna give you the vote is cuz you came original and it was a decent verse.

Overall: 5.5/10


Vote: Oz.

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