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Old 02-21-06, 11:35 PM   #1
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Flow wasn't too big of an issue, seemed more of a poetic type piece so flow isn't nessesarily a large factor... I thought that this verse was extremely good. Had imagary and emotion throughout, the dynamite was a good way of ending it off with emotion - showing that the problem has only just begun.. nice work .

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