Thread: Tears Of Ink
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Old 02-22-06, 01:14 PM   #15
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This was real nice, loving the multies and internal rhyming in this especially, Very well done. Only problem i got with it is that it felt a lil to complex at times, but other than that it was all good. My favorite bar was definitely the ending:

So I Drop Tears Of Ink As The Days Grow Old And Wither With Time
A Sinner For Love, Lost In The Midst Of Emotion...
......While My Thoughts Drift Behind

^^That was a good way to end it, in my opinion. Nice job man, keep it up.
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