? This wasn't "Ill" or "Pretty Good", it was just completely unpolished and very amaturish. You have no direction to your content and the structure alone is going to turn away most any reader who conciders checking this out. Some of this was boast and some you tried to go deep, but you've really got to jsut pick one because the two don't flow well together. And, you had spelling errors and stuff, just tryn' run a check and do some proof reads before you post next time.