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Old 03-08-06, 07:44 PM   #10
Sykill
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Hmmm I really didnt notice the ABAB untill much later in the piece which is a good thing. I mean it really had a great spoken word feel though it was in rhyme. Topic matter was good but your metas and descriptions I think need to be more creative. It was light on imagery as well. Overall I think it has a good message but technically isnt 2 spectacular.
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