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Originally Posted by Valor
Hope you Enjoy this....it is dedicated to the youth who is bullied or abused who can't take it anymore and feel low all the time...this is a fact about everyday kids in this every day society...
The Battered Youth
the shadow's my protection
It'll never leave my side
for it stay's through rejection
Ill never be left behind
the only thing we do correctly
is to argue and fight
so i wait for the beast to reject me
but hopefully they do what's right
the youth to me are harsh
IM strong but quick to fight the tears
while i sit here in the dark
wishing i can go back in time a few years
on many days i comptiplate suicide
but cant find myself to do it
so on most days i cuddle and hide
But today i say who cares, screw it |
I think this piece is aaight.
the shadow's my protection
It'll never leave my side
for it stay's through rejection
Ill never be left behind
everyone please listen closely
can you here mother nature cry?
the answer is no mostly
but i believe that is a lie
^^ these are my favorite blocks, especially the last one.
The piece as a whole took on a melodramatic tone, maybe slightly too much of a melodramatic, especially with the line about contemplating suicide. Up to then it was poetic and strong.