this was pointless..it had no twist......no resolution...anything....not to mention your imagery, adjectives, analogies were all pretty weak....and it was just..pointless..straight up..it might have been better had you explained the trials he went through trying to make it in the game in a lot of detail...but it was left vague as it could possibly be...you need to elevate a little bit..be a little more descriptive and shit....not trying to discourage you from writing..but seriously..you need some work...stay up though

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