This was really good man. I loved the concept, flow was real nice and the vocab was cool. I know u can up ur rhyme scheme much more, so i aint even gonna get at u for that. Overall man this was real dope. Favorite bar was:

Although Seperated, A Spark Til Lingers, Sculpturin Another Love
So While This One Has Departed.....
........A Rose Petal Falls And Brings A Tear Of Emotion From The Sky's Above.

^^Im defenitely feelin that bar man, great stuff man. Keep it up. Please rtf on anything in my sig. Thanks and Peace.