This was nice, really feelin it. The vocab was very good and imagery was nice too. Flow was great for me, no trouble with it. I really didnt see anything wrong with it. My favorite bars were:

Journey with me, across the sea of pain an' insane ...
Where's said the stained, wood pained blame remains
Innate shame rains, like the tears of a past movement
... Shrewd and prudent as the sky falls to prove it ...

^^I thought that was hot. Please rtf on anything in my sig. Nice drop man keep it up. Thanks and Peace.