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Old 03-19-06, 10:32 AM   #5
Bonafide
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I thought this was pretty good. Everyone had a nice verse. But you should work on ur structure so the reader will be able to flow thru it better. Other than that i thought it was fine. I liked that it was a debate rather than just talking about guns and that type of life. It gave it a nice feel. But good job keep it up.
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