this was ill....i actually thought i knew what you were saying..and I did....i didn't even click the link to the picture untill i scrolled down and say OMB's feedback mentioning the picture...i thought it was just an underlined word the provide emphasis
this was a great piece..best i've read tonight at the least
your rhyme scheme was very well done, appropriate words and the use of stanzas
great metaphors
good shit
return the favor if you get a chance
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2699946