word up kidd, that shit was pretty dope, i liked how u used the multies to end it up to another line. it blends in from one rhyme to another so 2 rhymes that dont Rhyme sound like they do. pretty tight. and u had good vocab and stuff. really liked the line of glory and our victory mandatory... pretty intelligent shit. keep it up. and i think u should finish this shit.
hit me up if u do so i can leave more feed kidd.

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