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I don't lose
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pretty good stuff....
you need to chill out with your delivery tho...you sound like your forcing some things....n i guess it puts alot of it off a lil specially in the first verse....like the hook, but re do it....i trust you can do it with better emotion.....your intro i didnt like....if your gonna keep it, turn it down a lil.....this isnt hate man, i like the song....its just some things you could fix to make it better.....good shit. rtf man....peace
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well i thought about the army
dad said, son you're fucking high
and i thought, yeah there's a first for everything
so i took my old man's advice
three sad semesters
it was only fifteen grand spent in bed
i thought about the army
i dropped out and joined a band instead
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