This flowed really nicely with the way you structured it and used your wordplay. I thought alot of your similies were really basic though. Thought this piece was a great job at self glorification, if you want to brag - this is how you do it.
One thing that really annoyed me - How You Capitilized Every Word. overall though i thought the piece was a pretty fun read, couldve used more complexity, but cool nonetheless.
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...483#post2710483