Beats not bad.

BLACK DRAG YOU NEED TO EQ YOUR SHIT!! bring that quality up man, it makes it easier to feel your lyrics as well as hear em. The story follows along nicely. Your delivery is right on time but your need to vary it so it dosen't become repetetive. This should have been two verses with three hooks on em to be a "song" too soudns liek about 20-24 bars that'd be a comfortable size for two verses. people forget short songs fast unless it's intense.

Peace.

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