Okay, let me start off by saying that it was cool you actually provided some info as to why you think it's a conspiracy. Howeverrr.. the topic is so highly overplayed that it almost seemed boring to read. Don't get discouraged though, just find a new way to approach this kind of topic besides Tupac Shakur. I thought that your flow was really good but you never really established a good read. This can be improved by constructing a legit beat inside your own head and just flowing to it... or, the easier way, watch your syllable count. Make sure you're using close to the same # of syllables per line and at the end. Ie.
oh and on the cover of the album "the 7 day theory".......
.................................................. ..........he is crucified
with 5 holes in his chest, funny, just how he died.
^it was alright, but could have been better if you reworded it...
overall i think you have some pretty good potential, just continue working on how you word your sentences, keep reading others pieces, and everything will come naturally for future writing. peacee
-my conspiracy verse
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