Decent pieces... both had the relatively same approach. Both contained little to no metaphors or similies which made it kinda lack some complexity but both pieces had a decent amount of emotion. Try to incorporate metas and sims without compromising imagery in the future. Overall I thought they were both written good but Drastic's structure and flow was better largely in thanks due to his nice use of internals. I was also feeling Drastic's verse had more emotion and the ending sealed it for me. Nice work both.

v/ Drastic

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