Thread: My Confession
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Old 04-20-06, 12:37 AM   #6
Introspection
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aye Paper View this was a nice piece right here; i think we can all relate to this theme. i was really feelin the line "My heart is a mess remove my shirt and feel the scars on my chest. Emotions are locked up in it call it cardiac arrest." good multie and metaphor. i thought that the rhyme scheme in lines 3/4 (expression/depression) got repetitive with lines 1/2 (question/aggression) though..but yea nice drop 8/10
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