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Old 04-22-06, 03:23 PM   #18
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DaTrus Is A Bitch!
 
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Precize

"how dare you try text you foo, fuck ya crew ill have um die next to u..
...pre Lives By the sword, only thing kontro Lives Bi is sexual..."

Your verse was inconsitent with what was provided in it, but some of the things you did provide were pretty well thought up concepts. I think if you become more consitent you'll have a chance at becoming a decent vet.


K.ontroveryz.Y

"if you even brag about beatin me, then your definetely a goof..
cuz like the doctors in the d12 situation, you couldn't "bring back" proof.."

You force too much. Though I thought the line above was the best out of your verse, you forced the last line. I mean nothing in your verse was really that hard hitting, because most of it was just false shit that you had to fill in to make something happen. You had some nice concepts but you need to tie them together with nicer more consistent verse.

Vote - Precize

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