Thread: [catching Tear]
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Old 04-25-06, 10:42 PM   #7
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you stayed consistent on your rhyme scheme and syllable count but like unreal said u shud try to throw in internal rhymes to keep the reader engaged in the piece. i liked it though, your details of being alone stays current with what your title is and helped give this story a nice tone.
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