vocab was good, the length seemed right and you really didn't even need to throw multies to keep it interesting cuz your word play took care of that

"Line after line, use the emotions to guide me
But if I speak from my heart then the words stay inside me"

nice play on words

"Learn to say what I think, without breaking the rapture
Because I’ll know when I go, that these moments were captured"

good way to end it, makes everything come together yup you are a writer!

BTW My first drop`s linked in my sig im still tryna get sum feed. rtf and return the favor aight? stay up

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