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Old 04-27-06, 09:31 AM   #9
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this shit was defniately nice valor. it had the vocab and structure on point. the imagery was there was well. i really like how you made the topic a story. i like this part

shared a room with Twelve others
no sisters, brothers or a father and mother

i also thought ysdat had a goo verse, his prob stood out more to me..........


sore feet stuck to this path of no return and end
I reach out to malachai, but he closes the book named friend
soulless empty inside, namless, no were to flee this place
time to melt the glass im made of, so you can no longer see your face

that shit was def nice as hell, good imagery, good flow and a beautiful description


rtf in my diary of a mad man topical
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