Good shit. Nice flow... Nothing seemed forced at all... Like, it all went together well.
Only gripe I got is maybe with the topic. Shit is pretty cliche, despite being executed well... Ya should always try to come off the top with some original shit. Sometimes it isnt enough to lay down your own version of a played topic.. you know?
And also watch the typos and abbreviations... I wouldnt recommend typing like you would in an instant messenger, cos it takes away from the impact... For example, fuk u and Fuck you or I luv u and I love you. Maybe its just me that thinks like that... I dunno.
Mind returning the favor?
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=227338