if he thinks you're a 2/10 then he thinks you're a 2/10. get over yourself. someone thinks your wack and that's that now STFU

but anyways now for the feedback

rhyme wise this wasn't that great at all...i think i only saw four bars/lines that even rhymed with each other...story wise i thought it was so-so but i think you shouldn't have made the story as far-fetched as it was, you could have explored the character's emotions and thoughts in more depth, in my opinion. you could have thrown in some decent multies to give the piece more of a rhythm and it would have made it's flow more interesting. also you need to up your vocabulary...

other than that, this was an ok piece, nothing special in my opinion by any means, but an ok piece nonetheless

~peace~