didn't know u rapped...thought u jus made beats so figured I'd peep ya out.....beat is koo...u make it? hook is bleh....I ono u don't sound to comfortable on the mic...ya flow is a lil mechanic sounding....an the "wit me" over an over got tiresome...shoulda switched it up afetr 8 bars then brought it back if u wanted to emphasize....ya breathe control, had sum foul ups here an there...u was cutting off some words cuz u was short on wind...def need to sure that up..aww man this hook really hurt track...if u had a ill hook on this beat u coulda goo goo an ga ga'd on the verses an song woulda been tight...so def a decent track wit alot of potential if u re-rerecorded an fixed the foul ups an writing repetiveness of verses an reworte hook an delivered it ALOT stronger....but def keep it up fam u got a good sound to ya if u polish it.......1\

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