This was very good man, I apologize for taking so rediculously long to respond to it. You actual have a very beautiful poetic style. The imagery was average, but average on my standards so that "dope" to just about anyone else. The emotion was what really got me, I felt this alot and that is among the most important aspects in poetry. The structuring was perfect... Usually when people first start writing they have these insanely long lines and the piece is just very sloppily presented, but this was great. Nice quick lines that got the message across. I really hope you keep with this and write a few more poems.