well, at first, it seems as though you're focusing harder on rhyming rather than the battle itself with the.....sex sell, best bail, best fail tip. i liked the simple wordplay with "u calling for battles...it drops like nextel...". this was an overall basic battle verse. however it was bad or terrible. nothing stood out to me, but i'm hard to impress, most vets are.

6/10 good luck.

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